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Topic: Contrast the way you behave and talk with your parent

Oscar Wilde, a worldly well-known poet in the 19th century, once said: “The only intoxication is conversation.” The vital role of talking and contacting in our relationships is undeniable. However, due to different themes, the way we express our ideas will be different. Family and friends are two important components among many relationships which we have in these days. Although both are meaningful to the majority of people, conversations and behaviours to parents have some key differences from the ones to friends.

First of all, the manners which I have toward my parents are usually more considerate and proper than the ones toward my peers. In other words, I have a more comfortable, freely tendency when I am with my friends. For example, I have a good sense of humor but I rarely expose that in conversations with my parents. If a funny comment is put in a wrong context, it can be regarded as sarcasm which hurts my beloved. Otherwise, humorous character makes me become an attractive talker in my friends’ eye, and they don’t give much thoughts upon sarcasm in most cases, as long as its purpose is simply making fun. Moreover, when I have meals at home, we have some dining etiquettes to follow, including not using chopsticks to pick food for others, not eating food directly from shared dishes, or not eating unless all of us have seats on table. But when I eat out with my close friends, we feel free to share, or to taste, each others’ dishes. So I prefer more selective manners toward my family members rather than my friends.

Secondly, the content of conversations with my family differs from the one with my friends. When I talk to my parents, we usually cover essential but boring aspects such as health, meals, work and school progress in order to keep in touch with our recent paths and conditions. However, when I discuss with my peers, our topics are common hobbies, lessons or trends. We share our opinions and points of view to build conversations which we can learn new things from. In terms of different purposes of talking, I consider generation gap as the main factor. In a nutshell, our parents’ world is distinguished from ours, so as the content of conversations.

Last but not least, the language I use to express my ideas to my parents is more polite, thoughtful, sometimes slightly formal than the one I use with my friends. In a casual daily conversation with my classmates, we make use of slangs, trendy phrases among young people on social platforms. On the other hand, I cannot use these slangs when I talk to my parents on dinner table; obviously they will get confused of the meaning of my sentences. One apparent reason is generation gap, but the subtle one is that I don’t want to hurt my parents. For instance, I can use rude language when I have conflicts with my friends. In my point of view, it is so disrespectful to my parents if I use contemptuous language to them.

In conclusion, relationships with both parents and friends are worthy to spend time and consideration, but there are some main differences in the way which I talk and behave towards them. Owing to the generation gap, not only the content and purpose of conversations but also the languages that I utilize vary. Besides, the manners I have when I am with my parents is more serious than the ones I have when I am with peers. (587 words)

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Topic: Contrast the way you behave and talk with your parent
Oscar Wilde, a worldly well world - known renowned poet in the 19th century, once said: “The only intoxication is conversation.” The vital role of talking and contacting in our relationships is undeniable. However, due to different themes, the way we express our ideas will be is different. Family and friends are two important components among many relationships which we have in these days. Although both are meaningful to the majority of people, conversations and behaviours to parents have some key differences from the ones to friends. First of all, the manners which I have toward my parents are usually more considerate and proper than the ones toward my peers. In other words, I have a more comfortable , freely and free tendency when I am with my friends. For example, I have a good sense of humor but I rarely expose that in conversations with my parents. If a funny comment is put in a the wrong context, it can be regarded as sarcasm which hurts my beloved loved ones . Otherwise, humorous character my sense of humour makes me become an a more attractive talker person in my friends’ eye eyes , and they don’t give much thoughts upon thought about sarcasm in most cases, as long as its purpose is simply making fun. Moreover, when I have meals at home, we have some dining etiquettes etiquette to follow, including not using chopsticks to pick food for others, not eating food directly from shared dishes, or not eating unless all of us have seats on are seated at the table. But when I eat out with my close friends, we feel free to share, or to taste , from each others’ other's dishes. So I prefer more selective manners toward my family members rather than my friends. Secondly, the content of conversations with my family differs from the one with my friends. When I talk to my parents, we usually cover essential but boring aspects such as health, meals, work and school progress in order to keep in touch with our recent paths and conditions my life . However, when I discuss with my peers, our topics are common hobbies, lessons or trends. We share our opinions and points of view to build conversations from which we can learn new things from . In terms of the different purposes of talking for conversation , I consider generation gap as the main factor. In a nutshell, our parents’ world is distinguished from ours, so as well as the content of our conversations. Last but not least, the language I use to express my ideas to my parents is more polite, thoughtful, sometimes slightly formal than the one I use with my friends. In a casual daily conversation with my classmates, we make use of slangs slang , trendy phrases among young people on social platforms. On the other hand, I cannot use these slangs this slang when I talk to my parents on at the dinner table; obviously they will get confused of about the meaning of my sentences. One apparent reason is our generation gap, but the subtle one is that I don’t want to hurt my parents. For instance, I can use rude language when I have conflicts with my friends. In From my point of view, it is so disrespectful to my parents if I use contemptuous language to them. In conclusion, relationships with both parents and friends are worthy to spend worthwhile for spending time and consideration together , but there are some main differences in the way which I talk and behave towards them in each situation . Owing to the generation gap, not only the content and purpose of conversations but also the languages language that I utilize vary varies . Besides, the manners I have when I am with my parents is are more serious than the ones I have when I am with peers. (587 words)
VERY IMPRESSIVE. YOUR ENGLISH IS SUPERB. PREPOSITIONS ARE HARD AND YOU HAD A FEW MISTAKES. IDIOMS ARE ALSO DIFFICULT AND NOT EASY TO LEARN. I AM CURIOUS AS TO HOW LONG YOU HAVE STUDIED IT. NI DE YING WEN HEN HAO!
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