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My first friend

My first friend is Fernando he has a lot of qualities such as: beautiful, great personality, charismatic, hard work, outgoing. Nowadays our friendship flourish into a great thing, because we consider each other like brothers. I want to describe 3 great moments he help me solve some problems.
I was leaving in São Caetano city country inside São Paulo State , at that moment he(Fernando) was leaving there too so he paid treatment to me have some help with a coach. When he did presented this project to me I stayed very happy and grateful. I was passing through heavy problems at that moment and that coach helped me to solve it.
In other opportunity he lend me some money about 500 reais.
Thereafter I still looking for making some friends in Araraquara city. But I am feeling a little frustrated because I m not getting nothing in this way I fell such a lonely person but my creed is turnover this scenario and getting better always.

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Thank you Linda.Quayle for motivating me in my progress. Have a nice day.
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My first friend
My first friend is was Fernando he . He has a lot of good qualities such as: beautiful . For example, he is good-looking , he has a great personality, and he is charismatic, hard work working , and outgoing. Nowadays our friendship flourish has flourished into a great thing, because we consider see each other like as brothers. I want to describe 3 great moments when he help helped me solve some problems.
I was
leaving living in São Caetano city country inside in São Paulo State , and at that moment he( Fernando ) was leaving living there too so he paid treatment for me to me have some help with a life coach. When he did presented this project to me I stayed was very happy and grateful. I was passing going through heavy severe problems at that moment and that coach helped me to solve it them .
In other opportunity On another occasion, he lend lent me some money , about 500 reais.
Thereafter I am still looking for making to make some friends in Araraquara city. But I am feeling a little frustrated because I ' m not getting nothing anywhere in this way area. I fell feel I am such a lonely person , but my creed is turnover to get past this scenario and getting get better always.
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Good luck! It takes time to find friends, but it will happen!
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