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Visiting Rio de Janeiro city.

I want to visit Rio de Janeiro . First of all I am going to mention the Christ the redeemer it is the most notorious point to visit there. If I have the opportunity I'll pass for slum's rocinha and Maracanã stadium.
My intention in visiting Christ the Redeemer statue is adore it. I am from a catholic family from Araraquara city country inside São Paulo State. I know it is an important touristic point known all over the world. On the same hand my soul will fill of hope and peace.
Despite slum's rocinha my purpose is dedicating some time in order to have contact with the culture inside that. For instance: how does this community live and work ? how does they are use to treat tourists there? And what the people living there intend to do in the next 5 years?
To finalize it's s great idea to know Maracanã stadium. I have the same point of view of Christ the Redeemer statue in this case. Maracanã stadium is known in all over the world . So why not visit it and get inside there maybe and play football there. Is not it?

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Visiting Rio de Janeiro city City .
I want to visit Rio de Janeiro . First of all I am going to mention the Christ the redeemer Redeemer statue it is the most notorious point iconic place to visit there. If I have the opportunity I'll pass for slum's rocinha also visit the slums of Rocinha and see the Maracanã stadium Stadium .
My intention in visiting
the Christ the Redeemer statue is adore to marvel at it. I am come from a catholic family from Araraquara city country inside in São Paulo State. I know it is an important touristic point a very famous tourist destination known all over the world. On the same other hand my soul for me, it will fill of my soul with hope and peace.
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Rocinha being a slum 's rocinha my purpose is dedicating of visiting would be to spend some time in order to have contact with and understand the culture inside that there . For instance : , how does this community live and work ? how does How do they are use to treat tourists there? And what the people living there intend to do in the next 5 years?
To
finalize finish with it' s s d be a great idea to know see the Maracanã stadium Stadium . I have the same point of view of as the Christ the Redeemer statue in this case. that the Maracanã stadium Stadium is also known in all over the world . So why not visit it and , get inside there and maybe and play some football there. Is Why not it ?
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